Dialogue is Stylised Talk. It should give a flavour of real speech, without seeking to recreate it on the page. (Record and transcribe a normal conversation: you’ll be surprised how incoherent it looks written down, even if it sounded just fine spoken.)In my writing, my aim is to tell the story without letting the words get in the way. That applies to the dialogue just as much as it does to everything else.I want my dialogue to be natural and believable, so it could work in a TV or film script.But …This is far from the only way to write good dialogue. There are plenty of authors who things differently – and I’m going to come on to some examples in a moment.Obviously, your dialogue needs to gel with the style of the rest of your work. If you have very prosaic, ordinary dialogue but the rest of your novel is much richer and more literary in style, that’s going to be a weird disconnect.
eg-We sat in silence once more and then I said, “What have you been doing with yourself all morning? Are you not bored?”“It is better than day-rooming it with the others.”“You prefer being alone?”She smiled. “I prefer armchairing to benching.”
2.“I said I’d show you a mystery.”“I thought you meant one of the treasures.”“No. I meant him. There’s something shifty about him. I’ve been keeping an eye on him. He’s up to something.”